Revised Annotation (3)
November 30, 2011
991002024 李書婷 Sue
1. I try to improve the structure of my article.
2. I adjust the order of the paragraphs slightly.
No Men, but Babies?
楊慈郁. (November, 21,2010). 不擔心單親 有子萬事足 http://tw.news.yahoo.com/%E4%B8%8D%E6%93%94%E5%BF%83%E5%96%AE%E8%A6%AA-%E6%9C%89%E5%AD%90%E8%90%AC%E4%BA%8B%E8%B6%B3.html Yahoo! News. (Original from Chinatimes.com)
In the past, people have the concept that women need to rely on the ability of men to survive. The duty of women is to take care of the family, that is to say, their social character is become a wife and mother. However, nowadays there is a group of women who are over thirty years old, independent, and not willing to get married yet, they may not want to have a husband, but they have the desire to have a baby.
Do unmarried women have the right to have babies via artificial insemination? According to the survey (2010, reported on Chinatimes.com) last year, people are discussing that there are 2322 participants being asked this question, 46.1% of them think that these women also have the right to be the mother, 37.3% of them think that there will have problems if children have no father.
Even though a woman chooses to be unmarried, she may still have the desire to become a mother. The most important reason why unmarried old lady want to have babies is because after thirty years old, the condition of women’s fertility will become worse than before, and it will be difficult for them to have babies when they are getting older. Even though they are pregnant, they may have more risk than other young expectant mothers through the process of pregnancy. They want to have their own children calling them mother, but they don’t want the constraint of marriage. Therefore, they want to be pregnant by means of artificial insemination by donor.
Recently in Taiwan, the fertility rate keeps going down, some reports claim that it is related to women who get married late or don’t want to get married. It is also a reason why people used to think that unmarried women are the “loser”, because people have the idea that women’s duty is to become a wife and a mother. However, things are change; women now also have the ability to work and not necessarily need to rely on the care of men.
Opponents think it is not fair to the children. In the conventional concept most of people may think general family involves a father, mother and their children. But if an unmarried woman wants to have the baby via artificial insemination by donor, there may be no father in this family. The children will have the love from mother, but will lack of the love from father. Arguing on this point, the supporter claims that even in a family with father, if the father abuse the child, the situation will not better than only have a mother. On the other hand, the divorce rate in this society becomes higher and higher, children may suffer lots of hurt from the separating of their parents. Also, to stay single is not an unchangeable condition, maybe the women will finally find her ideal mate in the future.
As a result, if an unmarried woman has the ability to take care of her children by herself, and she wants to be the mother, giving her love to her baby, it is a good way to fulfill her life as a woman. Moreover, it also can enhance the fertility rate at the same time.
You mention that people used to think those unmarried women are "loser" because they are not wives and mothers. Here I suggest maybe you can delete "mother" in this sentence because if a unmarried woman has a child, it is not that possible people will think she is successful. You still should focus on the relationship between unmarried women and marriages. If you really want to talk about unmarried women have the right to breed or to have babies in any other ways, then don't use the idea of "lose women" because it will misleading the readers.
回覆刪除I would like to present a question: what is the best answer should be when the child ask his or her mother for a father? After I reading this annotation I pondered it for a while. When a woman claims that she has the right to be a mother, then is that also reasonable for a child asking for a father? A woman wants no husband doesn't mean her child doesn't want a father, either. I try to answer this question but I cannot find a satisfying one. It seems that the happiness of having a father is deprived of by mother. Not every father abuse their child, and it will be nonsense just because some fathers do so then women decide her child should have no father.
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